Earlier draft A
Outside the interview room, she pulled the letter from her raincoat pocket and checked the address once more.
THE REVISION ROOM / PENNEDCANON
A small
change.
The whole story behind it.
Nora leaves her coat at security. Upstairs, she reaches into its pocket. One phrase changes—and the question, decision and earlier draft stay connected.
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THE WORKING EDITION / CHAPTER 02
Two drafts. One deliberate change.
Revised draft B
Outside the interview room, she pulled the letter from her document case and checked the address once more.
Both prepared versions are shown.
This resolves the local concern. The new document case would still need checking against the rest of the manuscript.
Trace this change back to its source01 · THE EVIDENCE
Read both passages.
Nora handed her raincoat to the guard. He hung it behind his desk and pointed her toward the stairs.
Outside the interview room, she pulled the letter from her raincoat pocket and checked the address once more.
Editorial question
Inspect the decision ↓The later passage uses the coat, but the earlier passage leaves it with the guard. Is a retrieval missing, or should the letter be carried somewhere else?
The quoted text establishes where the coat was left. It does not establish that retrieval was impossible. This is a question for the writer.
02 · THE AUTHOR’S DECISION
Keep the coat at security.
In this example, the author chooses to revise the later passage. Adding a trip downstairs would interrupt the scene; a document case lets Nora carry the letter without changing where the coat was left.
Other choices the writer could have made
- Add a passage explaining when Nora retrieves the coat.
- Revise the earlier scene so she keeps it.
- Defer the question until the scene’s sequence is settled.
PREPARED DECISION D-01
Compare the revision ↓Outcome: Revise Chapter 2, paragraph 2.
Reason: Preserve the coat’s location and keep the interview scene moving.
New detail: The document case is introduced by this revision. It is an author choice in the example, not a fact extracted from the earlier passage.
04 · THE VISIBLE HISTORY
Return to the change and its reason.
- Draft A retained
The earlier coat and pocket references remain available. View sources.
- Question linked to both passages
The review identifies the apparent continuity gap without treating an inference as settled fact.
- Decision D-01 recorded
Revise the later scene, keep the coat at security, introduce a document case. Read the reason.
- Draft B prepared
The changed phrase is visible beside its earlier version. Compare versions.
- Concern addressed in this example
The outcome points to the revised passage. The earlier draft, question and decision remain part of the record.
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